Since I didn't have a rough draft of my paper for Tuesday, I wasn't able to get any suggestions on it. However, I do plan on having a friend read over my paper before I turn in my final draft. I think I will begin my essay by explaining some of the research I did before attending the anime club meeting and then describe my experience. I want to do it this way because I think that it is important for me to let readers know about the anime club website and things like their calendar and amendment. Yes, they have an amendment and it's pretty legit.
As a reviewer, I'd say that I gave Whitney some useful advice. I can't help it; I did give some suggestions for rephrasing sentences and correcting grammar and punctuation. I also mentioned that she should go into further detail on some things (i.e. BSU meets at 4:34, why such a specific time? More detail on the game they played at the beginning of the meeting and how it demonstrated how STDs spread). Additionally, I told her about some issues that I had with the organization of the first two paragraphs. I felt that she should have one paragraph of solely background information and then discuss going to the meeting so that readers wouldn't get confused.
In all, I think peer review was successful for Whitney and I. I really took my time and examined each aspect of the paper so that I could give her the best advice that I could. Next time, I think that everyone should peer review in groups of three. I also think you shouldn't let us leave early; I think everyone should take more time to read through their partners essay.
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